The Professional

The Professional
by Jason Daniel

Rating: 1.25/5

Unfortunately, I just couldn’t be a fan of this story. It was all too predictable for me. Main character is a rough, tough, heartbroken guy who can’t get past his wife and daughter dying, so naturally isolates himself from the world and the bottle becomes his best friend. Since he needs money, he finally decides to work. So queue the damsel in distress, who wants to divorce her possessive, evil and dangerous husband, but can’t do it without the hero’s help. Shortly after, they both start feeling attracted to each other, even in love, and the rest is equally predictable. Some things were not consistent like her husband being so powerful and can’t get a team of professional killers who don’t care why he’s hiring them? And the ending… Knowing a child’s sex in her mother’s womb 2 months or less after being conceived?…
Plot aside, the writing was majorly off. I think there was not a single page on my Kindle that was not riddled with misspellings, typos, syntax and grammar errors, etc. Italics are used in the wrong places; both punctuation (most often commas) and whole words are used sometimes in excess, other times are missing (particularly prepositions); misspellings which made me cringe – like has instead of as; their instead of there, etc and even worse ones like three’s instead of trees, thing’s instead of things (come on, forming plurals should be pretty basic stuff for a writer!! and it really was all over the book, these are only a couple of examples), had went instead of had gone; verbs in infinitive form instead of simple past or past participle; adverbs used in place of adjectives and vice versa, and so on and so forth. Also, for some reason, the author switched the tense from past to present, from time to time. Some phrases were quite repetitive, like years of experience for Ethan and stuff along the lines of no turning back for Rebecca, if she goes through that path and whatnot.

I don’t mean to sound harsh but I just don’t think the book is ready to be released. I am giving it two stars instead of one because I can see the effort in writing it and there are some thought provoking things, though very hidden, like not knowing who you are married to. But it needs something more to make it stand out, to set it apart everything else already out there with such similar concepts. As it stands, it is simply too full of stereotypical characters and plot/line clichés, and just isn’t very engaging. Small things could have made a difference, like instead of saying avalanche was the safe word Ethan had taught Rebecca, describe that when it happened, so that when she finally says the safe word it has more impact; the reader recognizes it, not just Ethan.

And it needs a lot of editing.

Read from November 29 to December 01, 2014
GR Review

I would like to thank the author for providing a free copy of this book in exchange for my honest review.

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